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was enjoying the novel until the forced romance between marya and the protagonist. too forced. nor natural really disappointed. and it seems she's going to be a mainstay as the mc gon be her protector or whatever bullshit.
thanks for the informative text, really have me alot of what I needed to go ahead and read.
I am indeed handsome. cudos
can anyone help with the raws ?? ........
locking at chapter 15 is just a massive turn off . gon go Google this one
yessss I'm going to stay reading
very true it's football. the only sport where the ball is always mostly used with the foot
keep going but make the chapters longer and add more detail, information, conversation and realism. keep pushing
It's a good novels , with no errors that stand out. thou since advice for the author, it's wayyy too fast paced and chapters are very short. you could have really spent 2-5 on every development of his story it'll still be faced paced but filled with more detail and depth. there's not much attachment to the mc now as everyone praises him,his parents(after not believing in him in the first few chaps),the fans ,the system ,the coaches ,the world. you've got something with alot of greatness all over it, but it needs more realism ,conversations, depth and length. at this pace he'd become the goat in a few years.
what a pleasant surprise to come and and find it finished. thank you for at least doing that for us readers truly a great book and journey . thank you