Dreamy_C

He is moving house and will post when he gets the internet hooked up.

It would be funny if all he haid was “I always had this potential” and people misunderstood it as him hiding his power and sealing it away.

You know that Great Red is the dragon of dreams right?

How the heck did the mc just arrive into the concussion that the dragon in front of it was the embodiment of destruction and chaos? The more I read the more I think this fanfic is made using chatgpt.

Author please don’t just make people take the MC’s words in face value without showing any feats plus him talking about characters like some random wolf just happened to know about them. And all that talk about justice and good is annoying. Its more interesting to show in his actions than words. From the looks of it the mc will recruit all his followers through talk-no-jutsu.

I am just gonna say, I have nothing against you and if you are looking to better your novel here is my review. So I am going to be honest with you, from what I have read I believe you just started writing. You have good writing skills but not story making. First the main character felt too bland, too lifeless barely human. The way you have written the mc is as if he had been transmigrated a thousand times not some dude that was fused with some character in a situation he barely knows anything about by some unknown means. There have been no hints of what kind of world mc is and it doesn’t look like the mc cares to find out. Then the situation will Hinata, the mc was like “oh, yeah baby its Hinata” not “what the hell is Hinata doing in a modern settings world.”. No worries about the implications of Hinata being in that world, the mc didn’t even bother to think that if she was there then there might be more Naruto characters including dangerous villains like Orochimaru or the whole Otsutsuki clan. And don’t get me started on mc motivations and goals. Seriously I don’t have anything against Harem novels but when picking girls and getting overpowered is what the character’s whole story is based on then it gets old quickly. It would have been better to simply not give a purpose at all and simply let the mc wander around and find what they want to do gradually and formed a harem gradually during their adventures. Lastly the chat group and their interactions were done badly. They were to open with each other and leave much to be desired. Lastly I just know that Momo will just be a harem member and will have no character development or anything and will be forgotten in the background.

Mc needs this

So far so good. You never disappoint my friend.

Me: I don’t want to wait so long Author: Six chapters will be posted today Me:

Most fanfics(the one that I read at least) don’t have much in terms of character development and emotions. Most are just ‘perfect’ protagonists where everything they do goes right and every plan is flawless. Things like emotional weakness and trauma are considered ’pathetic’ and ‘beta’ in most cases so it’s rare for me to actually find a protagonist that actually feels human. That’s why I think you are doing pretty good.