sunny_mediratta

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I get what you are trying to do, but in this context it doesn’t work. The outsiders resolve is a slow paced fanfic with alternate world setting. From the very beginning it has been character based. We have a lot of time to get to know a character, understand them. Here, not so much so. In OTS, We see the character from the protagonist’s perspective, the people around them, and also from their own point of view. In my personal opinion, the issue is not with the writing, it’s with the pacing and story development. I get that the 3rd war is on going but that does not mean that the protagonist should go from no talent to already high chunin level talent. In fact it should be slower than normal. Remember, they are at war, that meaning patrolling, endless combat simulations, running ungodly number of errands, on top of that being at all times being combat ready, both mentally and physically. That all means little to no time to train. Remember your own setting, he is a Genin with barely any talent. He is exactly the kind of person who is crushed to fine power in the cogs of war. Him having any level of access to someone like Uchiha Shisui or fugaku is wild, let alone having time off to go train in land of iron. That shit is privilege of the geniuses and prodigies of which he is neither. Also, he needs a mentor. This point I believe will be better explained with an analogy. Supposed someone was dropped in the Amazon. He knows how to setup a tent and start a fire. Do think he is going to survive the Amazon? No, he is not. There is so much more nuance, knowledge, psychology and practical skills that go into this, never mind a war. He needs someone to help fill these gaps. One of the best things outers resolve does is show just how complex to is to be a Shinobi. Whether it’s filing paperwork, equipment management, navigating, using communication equipment. The protagonist is constantly learning, evolving. Getting newer opportunities, promotions, getting to known and being known by important characters.

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Everyone knows it’s not even a Choice

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Like the story so far. I find it realistic that initially minato would struggle with his throwing techniques and especially tiajustu considering he is an orphan and doesn't have access to clan techniques and training. One thing he should really focus on though is Chakra control. In this world it is chakra that reigns supreme.

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Have high hopes for the story. Intriguing so far. How it will turn out we shall wait and see.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]