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I liked the mystery in the story, and the background of the world as well..The annoying thing here is that you mixed the point of view of the first character with the point of view of the second character..that brings some confusion while reading, but I liked the rest of the aspects, By speeding up the pace of publishing, that would be great
ok ok i'm the author, first of all thanks for your helpful comment which is really clear and helps me, like i said, i'll try to give the hero what i can give him, but now he's still in the process of being evolving, he can't do much and he can't Getting something like this (for now), at least will happen if he go deeper into the outside world, and of course the Astral-eyes Analyzer path would be excellent despite its reputation and I'll dedicate a few chapters to talking about this path and other users of it.