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Alchemical item and potion ideas Reading glasses (increases field of vision + reading speed) Pen (while mp can automatically write whatever the user wants) Record Book (automatic sheet creation + automatic subject classification + can extract user thoughts to create images or drawings) Memory/Hyperfocus Potion (memory increase + focus increase) Sense Potion (increase of 5 senses) Potion 6 feeling (increases sensitivity to energies + increased instinct)
The premise is good, it just needs to improve the dialogues which are very robotic and give a real background to the MC, he literally appeared out of nowhere and the Starks are already allowing him to make changes to Winterfell's infrastructure, it doesn't make any difference sense
Honestly it was a little disappointing, I mean it was the author's choice that the mc basically in the first conversation with SHIED said that he came from another dimension and was gifted by someone with his capabilities, it just doesn't make sense for the author to have a careful personality base, that the mc cares about his identity, and the next moment he's telling SHIED that he came from another dimension, and let's not even talk about the mc accepting SHIED's shit, come on man they tried to hack his system twice , they drugged you and tried to steal the omnitrix, do something, I'm not talking about killing others but react like a person who had their life threatened for nothing
army of house elves, But seriously, it's worth him having some kind of group/organization, I mean if it was just a war between muggles and wizards it would be guaranteed, now HP x MCU, wizards need to unify to have any chance of survival
In addition to what I consider to be common errors in this genre (lack of depth in character personality in general, rushed events in a short period of time) I think what most disappoints is that it's not really kingdom building, I mean the MC just leaves out there dominating territories and plays into the hands of his "subjects" to administer, there is no type of discussion about choosing territory for construction, economic and food problems faced. Basically another "Lord of People" with op mc without any depth in general