VICTOR_ARAGON

El fanfic no está mal, pero es un coñ*zo el tema de los diálogos. Estaría bien si pudieras arreglar eso ya sea con comillas o giones. 😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎

30 chapters and we still haven't made it to Halloween. In my humble opinion, I think it would be better if you did fewer but longer weekly chapters, with each chapter covering 3 or 4 scenes. At this rate you will write chapter 70 and we still won't have gotten to the part about the detention in the forbidden forest. I think that if you make 2 weekly chapters (and even 1) of more than six thousand words each, the fic would be much better

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It makes sense for Harry to hide his ability, but keep in mind that his family is already on Voldemort's radar. And if you are worried that they will go after Harry, you should keep in mind that he is in Hogwarts under the gaze of Dumbledore and other powerful teachers, not to mention the castle's protections.

The idea is very good and the story goes quite well. The only thing I ask is that you don't write 100 chapters and you haven't passed the first year of Hogwarts yet.