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Bro-refine this sentence. you are stating the obvious and something you already alluded to
That was very abrupt him leaving. this should have been set up after he helped forge all the stage two swords
Yeah this clues in that the author wanted to move on With the story
Yeah That should be edited.
You change from third to fIrst person way too much. keep to one tone