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The concept of your story is fresh as the world background is quite interesting with the different countries and creatures. The sentences can be shorter as writing long sentences make it confusing.The character background is quite good but I hope more information is given as the story progresses!Overall great story:)
The description is AWESOMEEE
I really liked the description of every action and how you got into the details but not too much of it.I was able to visualise the actions of the characters.The story has an unique concept!
It is a unique idea to start of with and the plot is really interesting.Quick to read and the language is quite good.Great Job! Maybe longer chapters?
Aww thanksss!!
Thanks for the feedback!