Rowan_Jay

Thanks. I hope I figure it out too... you'd think they'd want me to upload???

Hello. Author here. For some reason, I cannot update "Magic in the Family". Webnovel's software won't allow me. I apologize for the inconvenience while I attempt to get to the bottom of this. I will aim to have a double update this Thursday. :(

It's been two paragraphs and I like this guy.

Haha. That's fair. No piece of writing is perfect, and subjective taste is valid. I'll update the chapter titles tomorrow. Thanks for the advice. Hope you'll stick around for Soren's story.

Creepy

Quick note on dialogue punctuation: , belong inside the dialogue tag. Wrong: "Please stop staring at me", he said, hiding his face behind his wings. Correct: "Please stop staring at me," he said, hiding his face behind his wings. A small thing, but it will make your grammar better. :)

An isekai with death leading to brutal penalties followed by a "re-load" back in time. Heavy focus on gore: if that's your thing, you'll find enjoyment here. After the first chapter, the writing quality picks up. Chapter one was hard to follow as the dialogue isn't tagged, there are too many unknown characters, and the scene has no context. However, once the second chapter hits, the scenes have flow, and the characters have both motivations and context. As of chapter seven, there doesn't seem to be a clear "main goal" beyond "complete quests to level up, and level up to complete quests." However, there are indications of larger powers at play.

Yeah... I'd probably have the same reaction.

Any suggestions on how I can increase my score?

Mom for the win!