I am Artryeh, Little Broathors. I write as a hobby so excuse me if my publishing speed is pretty exasperating. I wanna sharpen my skills, so any and all criticism is read and cherished! Pls do so!
I love this, writing's perfect, I like Jeremiah... but that might be my MC bias I usually have... either way though, I mean you could sorta describe the scene more, I mean background, I need an image of where the characters but that's the only issue, EZ to follow along though.