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There's only one chapter out at the moment, but I can say that I love guilty pleasure stories such as this. Sure, there's many fantasy VRMMO stories out there, but not all of them are executed well. With the beginning lines of this novel, there seems to be some promise here. Keep on writing!
Hello Author, I can tell that you've put a lot of thought into this world that you've created. The Royal Academy of Chess is kind of a silly concept if you think about it, but giving it a tone of seriousness with majestic descriptions and a storied history(AKA the Emperor Hero) works very well. I love the application of strategy to supernatural elements, and the characters all seem very alive and real, in no short part due to their attention-grabbing names. Although there aren't too many chapters out yet, I would recommend this webnovel if you're interested in a weak-to-strong progression with incredibly rich worldbuilding!
This story is well-written, with only minor capitalization errors/slightly confusing syntax choices. Still, for the most part, it reads well which is an important factor for any piece of writing. I enjoyed the fantastical descriptions of how Cain got his inheritance, and the fight scenes of him being a badass are fun. Personally, I would like for the exposition to be spread out a little more as to not make it too much of an infodump, and would prefer a more gradual power-scale. However, if you're into OP MC's that take what they want, then this is definitely the story for you!
I've just finished the prologue, but I can already tell that the story has promise. The main issue most webnovels have is readability. This problem comes before any other factor, and encompasses grammar, syntax, diction - how well the story flows. This story already stands out by flowing smoothly, and having a prologue that pulls you in RIGHT AWAY! Only a few chapters in, and I'm already invested in Renji's tale, and if he'll be able to survive the Death Dungeon..(and what those EX system skills mean!) Nice job Sir Author!
The prose flows super smoothly, and the dialogue makes sense. Very good grammar which is already a huge plus, because the story itself is very readable. The characters themselves have motivations, and act based on those motivations -> Main protagonist becomes stronger because they were so weak, and gets her 'revenge' on those who slighted her. I think that the story kind of read like a fairytale, and I wasn't too sure of when timeskips were going on or not going on, but aside from some clarity confusion, the serial has a solid beginning. Can't wait to see how the Academy is handled!
solid story, I can tell that a lot of emotion was poured into the words, and that feeling definitely came across to me while I was reading it. the grammar can use a bit of work, but nothing that overtly stops me from reading. good worksies!
This story has a main character who is pragmatic, and very, very cold-blooded. He will not hesitate to do what's necessary for his survival, and it's kind of a breath of fresh air to see a MC who commits 'evil' actions without remorse. If you're going to go, then run, right? If you're into intricate mind-games, interesting plot twists, and firm, calculating protagonists, this story'll do ya right!
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With its smooth prose and understandable plot structure, this story already stands out from many others on Webnovel. Where it differs itself even more, for me was with its realistic, and interesting characters. Each character serves their purpose to move the plot along, with believeable motivations. They aren't just black or white, "I must serve this person.." or "I must kill this person.." rather the characters fight with their vices, struggle to stay true to their beliefs - they're real people. And the dialogue especially is quite enjoyable, which is even more important in a political intrigue sort of plot like this one. Seo and Seol's interactions especially were a nice ping-pong battle of wits, loyalty vs. passion. Aside from a higher usage of hyphens than I would like, I recommend!