EchoingDusk

That's a Soul Kilometer mate...

Also, I'm just telling not asking, but do remember that Clone Troopers used a shit ton of EMP weapons which would kill Space Marines pretty easily... or, at least disable their Armour and let them be bombarded with plasma bolts... so yeah... Clones...

STOP! You don't have to change anything! I am just giving my personal opinion about points I don't like... not forcing you to change your story... doing so would be encroaching on your territory as a writer... my views so far have stemmed from the fact that the WH40K element seemed to have been overpowered in this fic while the Star Wars aspects have been reduced to mere punching bags... that is all I am saying l.... you are a good writer, a consistent writer... but a bit biased towards 40k... that is all...

read the book Shatterpoints or hear the audiobook, it isn't just instances that change history... it is sort of like seeing weakness that allows him to incapacitate an individual with a single blow... there's a site called Goldenaudiobook where you can hear it for free... don't know about word copy though...

ah... yes... I seem to have missed that one paragraph once Sidious started his inner monologue... But plagueis was... more skilled in biological experiments than pure force abilities... which justify your point again... yep... that's my mistake alright... still, I'm cranky Yoda didn't bend over Sebastian... or that you forgot Macr Windu can see shatterpoints...

yes... twice... and yes, blaster fire bounced off his body, but he stumbled with each shot... too many rounds even damaged his armour... and even Mandalorians died in large numbers, when they died in the tunnels...

Now that I read it again after the author's accusation of having just skimmed through this thing, is certainly... imaginative to suggest that a Sith, a force user who has the power of precog... wouldn't notice when someone's about to kill him or want to kill him? No, it is more accurate to say this whole fiasco about a single space marine defeating the combined might of the Jedi single handed is basically a Warhammer 40k fan's wet dream... And regarding the Space Marine's supposed immunity to blaster fire, it seems a rather selective understanding of Star Wars technology has been employed. To overlook the nature of blaster bolts as concentrated plasma, essentially a scaled-down, refined 40k plasma gun... basically, reduce a plasma gun's size to 1/5th and instead of its usual volatile chunk of plasma, it now fires a sniper bullet made of plasma that delivers all its payload on a single spot... is to ignore the inherent thermal and kinetic energy involved. Well, writer, I admire your dedication to your... vision. Perhaps next, you could write a piece where a single guardsman singlehandedly defeats the entire Death Star with a spoon? It would fit the theme... {P.S. In my personal opinion, not that I'm enforcing it on you, but simply letting you know, Sebastian of the Black Templar is dead and diced into little pieces, and the one moving around is a ghost... I would add an insult here, but I won't as conflict begets conflict alone...}