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Aokara

Aokara

Lv1

I have only realized the significance that "Blue Crow" has on mythology when I searched for a picture of one. My profile picture ain't mine and I thank whoever drew this with the utmost respect.

2021-04-14 UnidoGlobal
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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Postado

    For now, since it is just the first chapter, I won't be making a detailed review. All I can say for now is keep up the good work! I will be waiting for the next chapter when it arrives.

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    Hmmm i could see that there is some improvement. Keep it up.

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    Hmm... hiding his ability like Kiyopon, I see...

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    YATTA!

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    Oh ho ho. The turning point is near.

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    oh boy oh boy

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    Me, a math nerd, be like: wait til you get to linear law.

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    awww... I was hoping Sui-san would fight. Well, that was a good fight though!

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    hohoho...

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    Hmm... interesting. You like Genshin? Well, this chapter is pretty good. Easy to understand for a guy like me who gets bored really easily.

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    OwO So this story is inspired by cote. COTE with magic. This chapter is pretty good and yes, it is pretty interesting. Now, I should continue reading and see if my predictions are correct.

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    Hmmm... so far so good. Again, there are some grammatical errors. I think some editing would do it some good again. I would say the paragraphs were a bit too packed, so maybe separating a few of the sentences into shorter ones would be good.

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    When I saw that name of the academy, it just reminds me of COTE.

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  • Aokara
    Aokara2yr
    Comentou

    The narration is pretty good. Sorry if I am rude, but I did notice some grammatical errors. Making a quick edit or two will help make the chapter better.

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