JujumasterX

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See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

The information is necessary for the story to progress. And the paragraph states that the story takes place in an alternate reality. I understand the angle you are coming from, and I appreciate your contribution. But my take on fiction is somewhat open-minded.

I incorporate elements from eastern fiction and western fiction. Second, the story is set on a very fictitious Earth. Why you should I limit characters name to European names?😂 I'm not even from Europe. Last and Importantly, it's my choice

Chapter is good.The story has potential.Keep it up and do a better job at punctuating sentences.

yo, advice from me, don't use real word religious figures and objects in your novel. Twist them, like rename the religion, it's object and other affiliated things to it. This is to avoid drama that could get your book banned

give a paragraph dedicated to your character making a speech. DON'T include it in the body of the story