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i feel like there should be some timeskips 'cause this is taking way too long, she has completed everything she wamted to do, we know they are going to another planet soon and she wants to train in magic, easy timeskip to when they are on the next planet, so we can get the ball rolling onto the story since at this point this story just feels like a long prologue.

yeah this is chatgpt 100%, dropped. this had so much potential aswell.

is this a translation? or just some chatgpt nonsense?

A good and strong start, interesting path the book is leading towards. A big thing around Superman and supergirl is the destruction of krypton, so having our Mc re-colonize another planet with a yellow sun is interesting. Can’t wait to see were this leads. Only thing that kind of irks me is how in some chapters progress is fast and in others literally nothing happens. Keep going strong!💪

Idea and the premise is good, everything else is just bad. Multiple cliches and commonly used tropes. Subpar English with unnatural sentences.

this is if i remember correctly is written in, i think portugese, then pasted into chatgpt or something that then generates it into english.

would be fire if for one of the more vilent missions he undertakes he is equipped with gear that matches one of the outfifts ghost for CoD wears as a subtle nod to the name