AkuaSenpai#6969

It really says something when you read a book for a genre you're not really in to and somehow you actually enjoy it. This actually makes me want to pick up more similar books as it's crafted really well and has me intrigued. Never thought I'd say that! Keep up the updates, I shall be reading!

Really quality writing! Super impressed with this one; I havent spotted really any grammar or spelling mistakes so far - the story is really gripping. Also, I love Vampires!

Very interesting story, it starts with a fair bit of lore and exposition but it works! The writing gets progressively better with each chapter which is always good, there are a lot of updates and consistent chapters. I’m excited to see where this goes.

You mentioned you wanted me to show you the change in tenses. So in this line you are speaking in the present using present tense words yet in the next line everything has already happened and use of past tense verbs fills the line. Its not a major deal, just something I noticed. I love the story!

A very interesting take on the isekai formula; at times it feels like an authentic period drama with a modern twist. Theres a lot going on and that works to its strength. Some minor issues with tenses in the writing but nothing major - I reccomend for fans of classic lit or who want an interesting interpretation of isekai.

Really strong opening; it gives off the feeling of very early stories like the Tale of Genji but with a modern twist!

Ooooh thats still on my planning list; but quite a few of my favourite anime serve as the inspiration for this. One being Jahy-sama, which I’ve heard is similar to The Devil is a Part Timer! Other inspirations would be the Dragon Maid anime and the So I’m a Spider, So What? light novel.

Really strong opening to the story and a plot that follows through; I feel emotionally drained but in the best way possible. That was intense - really love what you have going on here and excited to see more!

Welp, well I'm traumatised now. Great opening though, really pulled on my heart strings there!

So much greatness here; all I can say is that I'm really enjoying reading this story, more than I do most other stories on here. There's just a really engaging tone that it carries throughout, with a rich world to delve into. I'm not caught up to the latest chapter but I just want to put my two cents in - read this novel!

Such an interesting first chapter! I really love the whole feel of this so far, this is definitely my kinda vibe.

Great writing quality all around, really impressed with this one! Line length, use of vocabulary, everything is just off the charts - you should be really proud. The story is very interesting, some more chapters though please!

Wow, okay the lore runs deeper than any book I've seen on here so far. The world-building is great and the story is going in a very exciting direction. This is really a world to get immersed in and enjoy. There are a few things holding it back like minor grammatical errors - it doesn't effect how the story is read so much but there are moments where it does break the immersion a little. But in all honesty, that isn't enough to pull you away from what is a great narrative.

I'm so glad you enjoyed it and it has gripped you, I can't wait to show you what's in store for these characters!

Waaaaaah, I live for reviews like this. Thank you so much, I really hope you continue to read and enjoy these characters as much as I do. You made my day!

I'm glad it was a curiosity garnering experience! This is just the first few steps of a character focused journey of self discovery - I hope you stay along for the ride <3

Thank you so much <3

Loving this story, even if it is still in its infancy. There is a lot of tension and intrigue, the characters feel believable and something about the experience of reading it is just irresistible, constantly leaving you wanting more. There is a heavy focus on dialogue and the characters which honestly is my favourite thing in stories like these, so honestly, great work. My only one minor criticism would be the reliance on ellipsis, which I think can sometimes work against you when the rest of the writing is so strong. You can definitely show the passage of time through word choice and line length along with the occasional use of ellipsis. But other than that, it's a 10/10 in my book so far! I'm honestly glad to find something with this much potential so early on in it's run, but I'm a little annoyed I can't just pick up the next few chapters now as I am yearning for more!

I love this very character and dialogue focused writing!