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Coyle

Coyle

Lv3

Twitter - @Cooyle

2021-02-04 UnidoGlobal
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Postado

    I think this story can be something great, however, there is a big problem in this tale. The author puts too many unnecessary descriptions and info dumps. (Ex: Chapter 1) we don't need to know all of that right at the start. Also, the writing style isn't very appealing to me (maybe because it shows the emotions and motives of everyone, which seems great in theory but isn't at all. There is no mystery.) That being said, the story seems to be progressing rather well and I'm sure that with time, the 'problems' I pointed out in this review will change. Please continue with the great work, author!!

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    Conqueror of Magic
    Fantasia · AMonarch
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Respondeu a AMonarch

    Thank you for the review!

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    Doomed to Eternity
    Fantasia · Coyle
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Respondeu a AceAmbrosia

    Glad to know, thank you for the review!

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    Doomed to Eternity
    Fantasia · Coyle
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Postado

    While this is not the type of novel I usually read, I liked it. There were errors in the grammar but nothing that ruined the experience too much. (But if possible, please find a proofreader.)

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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou

    I found this pretty enjoyable. Please give me more chapters!

    Ch 5 CHAPTER-4
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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou

    He is dumb

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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Respondeu a Coyle

    I'm not sure if mam is also correct tho

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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou

    Btw the correct word is "Ma'am"

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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou

    at this rate she will end like this:

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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou

    nah

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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Respondeu a prettygirl_93

    Ahhh, thank you for the answer (:

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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou

    What is a tiffin?

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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou
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    Love or Truth
    Fantasia · prettygirl_93
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Postado

    You got me hooked with 3 chapters. There is nothing more to say, at least for now. (Please update more often, author. And also, continue with the good work!!)

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    The Horatius Era
    Fantasia · AceAmbrosia
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou

    You got us all hooked

    Ch 3 Stone of Soma
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    The Horatius Era
    Fantasia · AceAmbrosia
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou
    "You want a piece of my vitality? I want yours, too, fuckers!" Alex let out a demented laugh as he pounced at the dogs, slashing away at their skin that was covered in mana consisting of the element of darkness. "The feeling of hunger is mutual, idiots! Greed, is that the only emotion you have?"
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    The Horatius Era
    Fantasia · AceAmbrosia
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou
    The bells rang endlessly as if there was no tomorrow. The shadows lunged from rooftop to rooftop, moving at speeds humans couldn't even comprehend for a substantial amount of time. Their energy reserves were nigh-infinite, which is why they were regarded as the best assassins of Telos Dou Dromou.
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    The Horatius Era
    Fantasia · AceAmbrosia
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Postado

    While the grammar and presentation have massive issues, this story shows potential. While the premise is nothing too original, with how much effort the author is putting on making new chapters, I wouldn't be surprised if this novel became famous. Continue with your hard work author! And if you can, please try to find a proofreader.

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    Primal online
    Fantasia · Quasy
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  • Coyle
    Coyle1yr
    Comentou

    huh

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    Primal online
    Fantasia · Quasy
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    Coyle1yr
    Comentou
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    Primal online
    Fantasia · Quasy
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