MrBaskara

To be honest, there are not a lot of things about your world. The same goes for character design. It's just the occasional line about their shapes and faces. Not much to go with. The story pacing is average I'll say compared to other novels I've read.

Overall this storry is intriguing and good. But a lot of missplelled and missing words. But I do recommend becuase it might get better after a few more chapters.

I think you meant snapped both of his thumbs.

You forgot he “after” when.