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The_Pianist

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2020-12-11 UnidoUnited States
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  • The_Pianist
    The_Pianist3yr
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    I'd say so far that the overall plot is interesting. There are a few spelling mistakes here and there, but I like the characters so far. In terms of dialogue, the characters didn't really sound like you'd assume they'd sound, such as the driver asking about what Beacon's power was. Furthermore, grammar is a bit off, I'd check over the next chapter before publish.

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    Fantasia · Aten_Deitine
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  • The_Pianist
    The_Pianist3yr
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    Tbh I feel like you should set up lore either in a prequel book or just explain it as exposition in this book

    Ch 1 Prolouge
    Manawell
    Fantasia · Aten_Deitine
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  • The_Pianist
    The_Pianist3yr
    Respondeu a rebecca_ringdomsto

    Bot pog?

    Manawell
    Fantasia · Aten_Deitine
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