BB_R_406

There are repetitive paragraphs continuously throughout this book and that fact you failed to catch that showed you did no actual editing of a finished product. Do better I would have enjoyed reading this if it was not for the repetition.

books are supposed to have some mystery to them why would you put all of this information up before even starting the story. Put this in the book you're writing we'll read it there. we have no information about your characters or what any of this even means before starting to read your story bud. I chose not to even continue reading after seeing this as the start of it. Do better

So far the character development and story plot aren't bad, would like a bit more of a comprehensive explanation of abilities and character data.