Ronan and ... , Who?

Shame, I was kinda hoping for Shion.

At this time 6 chapters of this are out, of these I've read 3 so take what I write with a grain of salt, maybe it will improve down the line. -This entire fanfic soo far feels like the wet dream of an overly horny teenager. -The reason for the MC's reincarnation is idiotic to the extreme. -The mc is born as a child born of rape, now this in itself is not really a problem, more so in how it's handled. After the MC's mom gets home, Mito, essentially threatens to kill her if she dares to make the choice regarding her own body, to terminate the child, and basically tells her to just get over it. And EVERYONE treats this like some completely normal shit to do. My problem is that this didn't need to be handled like this, the author could have made Mito offer to terminate the child, with the MC's mom considering and then refusing it, finding meaning in raising an innocent kid after the loss of her career, which would have actually been an inspiring character trait. But NO instead let's tell the rape victim to MAN UP already. Really? Anyone intending to read this will pretty much find this all out in the first 3 chapters so I really don't feel like this is spoiling anything.

There is something deeply wrong with you...

It initially started out fairly well, but her "stat page" quickly becomes a barely comprehensible wall of meaningless text. The 'romance', if you could call it that is surface level and altogether about as entertaining as watching paint dry. The story takes a rather sharp nosedive at two points in particular, the events with the phoenix force, and fetishizing the mc's system and turning it into a love interest. (this happens with multiple system ai's)

This was waaayy too short :( Oh well, good chapter.

Wait, so in this AU of yours, Jean is not a phoenix force avatar?

Reading what you wrote so far, this story would be way more interesting, if instead of another overly cliched, system/transmigration story, you just wrote it as in the first chapter, a Kryptonian in marvel. It would be an interesting read how a real Kryptonian would handle Earth instead of Supermen. But that's just my opinion.

This chapter doesn't really make much sense for two reason. One, Atlantis's consoles woke up in the series, because a number of people in the expedition had the gene. And two, her language skill is just stupid, just because I can understand English, it doesn't mean that if I open a physics dissertation, it would make any sense to me.

+1

+1 It would be rather stupid to not get it after talking about it so much

Just one word .... Injustice You sure about that want for Supermen?

I get that this chapter was meant to show Venelana being a complex character and everything, but I must admit that I utterly despise your version of her. Not that she's a bad character, just honestly dislikable. I can only hope, even though it's unlikely that eventually, you make Rias kill her. It's doubtful but here's hoping xD

If we already have the servant of one abstract entity in the harem, then we need a second one as well. Jean Grey for the harem!

Did she already forget Akeno?

I'm sure you've made a lovely story, but for the love of God you NEED an actual translator, not Google translate. The premise sounds interesting but I couldn't get through even the summary without writing this off as, liable to cause an aneurysm from bad, incomprehensible grammar.

thx

This was just all kinds of disappointing. I mean after 3 days, a new chapter and it turns out to just be a massive chapter long rant about the US. No comments about the rant, I'm not going to argue people's sociopolitical opinions on webnovel of all places. (at least it was a thought out opinion) Also, isn't she trying (and failing) to keep a low profile? So what's with the "You people" and "Your government" in the rant?

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Interesting so far, but please for the love of all that is holy, PLEASE do not make her actually vocalize her technique names, like sure put it like 'this' showing that she's thinking it, but if you vocalize it I think I'll die of Cringe.