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Not going to lie, I was originally hesitant to read this, because based on the summary I assumed that the "hero" she would train would be Bell, which had honestly been done to death already, but I was very pleasantly surprised by who it actually was. Overall, so far it's been a great story, and a perfect example of how to write an OP mc, (in this particular case by focusing more on character interaction and humor). Honestly my only complaint is I wish it would update more often.

Really? So it's a character based on Tiamat, the primal DRAGON goddess of life, without an ounce of dragon in her? Also her entire build basically screams support character.

Except, that the chakra isn't lost. In the episode where Kakashi was explaining his training plan to Naruto, he describes that after dispersal, most of the chakra returns to the user, carrying the memories, and physical and mental exhaustion of the clone.

This entire chapter just feels weird. Let's summarize: Wanda with an incredible amount of power, decides to start walking toward the king of Sokovia without any plan. On the way, she meets "noname random character No.1" who randomly tells her some bullshit platitudes about how "power is not enough" (despite everything so far proving otherwise), after this, she again completely unpromptedly tells Wanda she has to earn their trust, who for some reason goes along with this, and lets her take her to "noname random character No.2", who after some more empty platitudes, sends her on a fetch quest to "earn their trust". So after this brief summary, I hope my problem is obvious. Basically just WHY? Also BTW, if you are going to do Symbiote dialogue it would make it easier to read if you put it in ' ***** '.

Presumptuous much? When exactly did she imply that she was there for their help?

Wow, it's been a while since I've read about an MC this idiotic.

Honestly I would say Jean would be perfect. She's got great potential as a character, and the comics and movies severely misused her, reducing her to a sometimes semi-psychotic, broodmare, forever stuck between severely disappointing male love interests.

Creating an organization where all the top brass are disloyal people who would kill her the first chance they get seems incredibly stupid to me. Like Konstantin and Ana offer nothing that you could not get from a more loyal source in marvel.

*cough* Gideon Malick *cough*

No matter what he says,her not killing the Joker here would be plain idiocy