Frantisix

Everything seems very forced within the story. Read 20 chapters to get a feel for it and I personally think a longer “prologue” to the betrayal is much needed. Main character is supposed to be the top of the first years and a genius but no one listens to his side of the story which is very weird and feels too forced without more context. Maybe a few chapters of the Academy characters interacting before hand could sell it better but even the parents not listening ,after giving their all to send him to that Academy, just feels horribly forced. Then he’s accepted no problem at all within the aunt’s household… either way more worldbuilding and fleshing out of every character’s motive is really needed. POV switching is prevalent within the story as well but personally, I think it should be handled differently by making dedicated chapters or a cleaner text break within the chapter instead of just the next paragraph.

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I wish Sunny losing his fate made me forget about him for a bit too, so that I could bulk read these chapters 😭 The anticipation for each new chapter is killing me.

Eunuch*

Didnt he just say “eyaah” to cast First Aid as a baby? Does that mean he can just has to speak with a spell in mind to shorten his spells?