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🇵🇭 || demigod | shadowhunter | divergent | potterhead | tribute | grisha | and all the others i forgot to mention

2020-07-20 UnidoPhilippines
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  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Postado

    Great story! The plot is very intriguing as well as the world background. There are just some things I like to suggest though. Instead of referring to the characters as His/Her Highness [name], you can just opt to mention their first names instead to make it more easy to read. Also, I noticed some redundancy. Searching for synonyms about the same word might help. All in all, the book is already good, just a little editing and it could already line up with the best. Good job and keep writing!

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Respondeu a Madyan_wani

    Thank you so much!

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Respondeu a Faysal_Ahmed_5058

    Thank you so much!

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Respondeu a bleedingpapers

    thank you! i'm glad you loved it <3

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Respondeu a bleedingpapers

    Thank you so much!

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Respondeu a Mel_Aniv

    Thank you so much!

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Respondeu a Aeipathy_02

    Thank you so much!

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Postado

    Nicely done! The plot was interesting and somewhat mysterious. The description and narrations were very easy to read although I can say that the writing quality still has lots of room for improvement. I do suggest you make the synopsis less vivid. Two-three sentences might not be enough to get your readers hooked. Still, good job and keep writing!

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Postado

    Very well-written. The scenes are perfectly described and the plot is also interesting. The synopsis was good enough to hook people into reading. There was one thing I noticed though, I just want to suggest to make the chapters longer, probably 1.2k-2k characters since it will be more efficient to read, some readers would also prefer it too. However, this is only my opinion, it's still up to you. Good job and keep writing!

  • ephemery
    ephemery4 years ago
    Postado

    For someone who wants light and romantic stories, this surely is for you. I loved how you described all the scenes, especially in narrating the character's actions although there can still be something to be improved in the world background aspect. Still, good book and keep writing!