CheekClapper2K

The top idol on the billboard def got one too

Sounds like a good nights rest to me 🤷

TFC

Name reminds me of another novel about soldiers

Paragraph is copied underneath, personally I think the second one reads better

I guess u can replace all the ash with ‘I’ but I ain’t know how that would affect how smoothly the story reads

Don’t know how to fix the problem either but just wanted to pint out the POV ain’t consistent. “I” is used along with Ash’s inner thoughts but then you also used Ash’s name to refer to himself-making it a first to third then back.