Inferior_Macaroni

The story isn't bad and I love the premise. I would just prefer if most things were in passive voice. It makes it a little weird to read for me personally, but I guess one gets used to it as you read on and the story unfolds.

A little quick to the adjournment of court. Why is the judge requesting Star boy to introduce them. The court system in my country you are listed on the court documentation of who is being represented by whom.

Great quality of the writing in itself. It is quite descriptive. The characters also get described enough to be able to picture them and the scenaion/scenery.

A morgue smells like formaldehyde and death. Hospitals smell like chemical cleaning solvents and musty, sick people. At times also smells like puke.

Will do. Thanks.

I've never been a fan of vampire based novels due to it being an over used genre or if used written about like some sloppy Twilight romance knock-off. But this is more gritty. Well done to the author for using a horse instead of flogging a dead one.

I like the world building a lot. The character building and description is fantastic. Strong writing quality that I am a personal fan of and enjoy a lot. I would like to see more chapters more often if possible. But don't rush if it'll drop your writing quality. Never sacrifice that it sets you apart from other authors.

I love sci-fi and I really like the authors emotive and emotional driven description of characters. It drives character growth well. Can only see the author getting better at which will only improve the quality of this book.

Loving the quality of the writing. The character introduction is great and the intrigue will most likely be high in chapters to come. The revenge plot is something that I can't wait for I can just see it coming.

Thanks so much for the response. Great to hear that you enjoyed the first of many chapters to come. I'll definitely be adding some characters and expand on the world itself.