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This "No sense of direction" excuse is getting old. He's a Space Mage - no, a Super SPACE Mage! How on earth does not he have a sense of direction?! His Super Space Spell is the Axis of Death. AXIS! How is he still bad at directions? If that's not enough, he's also a Chaos Mage and Summoning Mage. That's like 75% of all the Dimensional Magicks available to mankind...
The pacing of the story is quite good. The paths of each charaters diverge then intersect directly in a singular flow/path. However, there are times where this aforementioned path is too direct which takes out the excitement on the plot. For example, FC wants to do this, and thus that very same scenario indeed happens on the next scene. The lack of unconventional obstacles that the FC had to improvise through denies us of the chance to see how she reacts at extra factors that she had not considered beforehand. Having said that, a direct plot line is still an effective approach to build up tension quickly and progress the story smoothly.
Liam threatened Alfred by cutting his bonus for five months... does this imply that Liam gives bonus to his employees every month? If so, hot dang, that's not a bad boss at all! And those employees probably deserved having their bonuses cut for slacking off their jobs..
The story has a fascinating take on the sci-fi setting and galactic explorations. The author set-ups the variables then mashes then them up on the succeeding chapters. The problem here, if you may, is that the set-ups done with the use of "*****" happens too often in a single chapter. This could lead to losing the momentum driven by the main plotline. Nonetheless gaining insight from different characters is a good technique especially if it's done properly..
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The premise of the story is quite interesting, carrying a promise where the MC would travel across the lands and encounter various Classes or Character jobs. The downside here, if you may, is that somehow the situation the MC often gets into is a little too unfair that it could border into being unreasonable. Nonetheless, this kind of approach has a potential to be a good drive to move the story forward if done masterfully..
I would suggest, if you may, that Troan's time with the other paladins should have been a little longer so that there is indeed an emotional attachement to these characters... But hey, good writing nonetheless..
The title of the Chapter is "Celebrate" and they did so... but then, that escalated quickly...
From wolves, to tigers, to Anacondas, to gargolyes...? That is quite a jam-packed area...
From wolves, to tigers, to Anacondas, to gargolyes...? That is quite a jam-packed area...