It came a bit out of the blue? It's sad but it didn't feel that connected to the story for me. But not sure how to do that better. Maybe do multiple bits of dreams over 2 or 3 chapters or let the nightmare be witnessed by someone? Otherwise good idea to get more of a background story for the Mc.

I think it's Not healthy how he thinks. I have the tendency to analyze what could be done better and it helps you improve but it doesn't make you Happy because it's never perfect. Sometimes you have to Look at what you did good doesn't mean you can't build on top of that. definitivly harder to so when you hurt all over in the Hospitalbed.

Thanks for the chapter. Just what I needed right now 😉

thanks for the chapter. I would say either dig down under the earth to stall or give Up. Proved himself enough as a genin against a chunin. As Always nicely written engaging fight as well fleshing Out other characters.

Thanks for the chapters but that cliff though... Hope it will be a close fight

I usually don't read stories with so few chapters. But I am happy to have started yours. I think the story and your writing (choice of words) are really good. Hope you have fun with it and we can enjoy more 😉

Thanks for the chapters. Reading your story makes me want to write my own because it is well written. When I start writing I stop after a while delete everything and ask why it's so hard to write something good. I like the psychological aspect and struggle in this chapter making him more human than any other Mc in all most everything I have read on webnovel. Not only FF. So thanks for the hard work

I think it's too cringe skipped most of it

Thanks for the chapters. I like the pace and that it's slow progress that takuma isn't a giga Chad who slaps every one around with his eyes closed. There are enough instant op mcs out there but little hard working ones. I would have liked to see danzos behind bars because he is just so dispicable. But there are more options for antagonist with him still free so I am excited how everything plays out and what's going to happen next. Also many more opportunities to change canon. Happy days

Glad you are back. Hope you are getting better. Nice of you to post so many chapters 😉

Thanks for the notice

I am somehow too dumb to comment at the end... Just for a question do you intend to rewrite small parts to make the story more smooth or will you leave what you have written as it is? Think you could skip after the tour to let him pass out when there is no staff or teacher, won't really change anything so either is fine. I might just be grumpy because I didn't want him to get bitten 😉

I don't think a trained assassin would let himself be bitten by a spider. Also too op is boring.

He is strong enough I think. Trained like a soldier engineering his own suit like Tony should be fine?

Thanks for the chapter.

Best wishes and hope you get well soon.

I think your intentions got across the question might be how convincing that is. A 17 year old trained for years as an assassin seems like he is brainwashed a bit to not be tormented by what he has done. You teased a few things if I got that and his past might be explained in the future it might not. I don't think you have much explaining to do. People love to complain don't take it to heart. You won't be able to make it right for everybody so do right for yourself and many people who think alike will be grateful.Happy days

Thanks for the chapters. You are doing good. I think it's interesting and has fun in it the chapters are long enough that you feel something happened. Also the idea is new to me at least. I think you can confidently keep going. Hope you have fun writing 😉

Thank you! I don't think you did a bad job with side characters, there is a time for everything and till here there was more focus on the Mc and the world/circumstances, he is still more focused on himself and his advancement than on relationships were you can flesh out more of the side Chars. Or at least more easily. You are doing a great job 😉

Thanks for the chapters. The physical therapy is kind of weird in the ninja world setting. But also a bit funny. Keep up the great work always happy when I see you wrote more. Would love to see takuma messing up danzos plan to get shisuis eyes.Happy days