"No it's nothing I promise, I really did make some good friends, I have to rush off now, Bye you guys," Peter said as he took off out of sight of the other two.
"Hey guys, I just remembered that I promised to meet up with a few people from school tonight." Said Peter. "It was great hanging out with you guys but I'll see you when you get back to the dorm."
Interesting story you have here! I love all the different characters and the different personalities you gave them! The story invites you in as if you're there and makes you want to read on! Good work! ♡
Planet Caladi, a planet that was mostly covered in desert and contained low tier beasts. Its day cycles were also vastly different compared to that of earth. Instead of the 24-hour day and night cycle that earth had. Caladi contained a 72-hour cycle. It was brilliant for those that loved the sunlight and heat.
The balls flowed a similar pattern to his hands, Striking at different directions. However, Momo would simply step forward, move back or turn his body slightly avoiding each of the balls. He then grew tired and grabbed one of the balls mid-air that was heading straight for his face.
Not knowing what to do, Peter ran out of the room, only later to return with everyone else. Then when he saw Quinn, someone who was just as weak as him, stand up to the second years, Peter felt a pain in his heart so strong. He had betrayed them.
Why? Because the whole reason Vorden was tied up on the slab in the first place was because of him. The other day when the second years came to see Peter, they had come with a proposal. Help them get Vorden to come to the assembly hall and he would be protected by the second years.
I love the story idea and how you pull us into the book by the second chapter! I haven't seen this idea done, it's interesting and refreshing! There are a couple of typos but it'll be an easy fix with editing! Great job on writing so much too! I'm jealous! Keep up the good work!! ♡
Beautiful story you have here, I couldn't stop reading! Third person tends to get messy but you kept it clear and concise, easy to read! Definitely will be reading more of this! ♡♡