I'm blunt but please don't take it personally when I give negative reviews and constructive criticism. There are way too many inexperienced youth being sold toxic behaviors as acts of pure romance.
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Emotional breakdowns unfortunately leave you raw and vulnerable and thus desperate to hear whatever would bring you peace. She's likely hoping Hades would disprove those warnings she got.
You have gaslighting down to an art, Hades. But I wouldn't put it up in an art museum because the visitors will doubt if they had ever gone to the museum before.
Jules ain't lying. But Hades will still act offended.
That you're planning to commit mass genocide? No, she does not know that.
I don't want to risk paying for repeated or overly redundant chapters. So I'll stop here and hope some time in the future it gets edited to fix these issues. Good luck, author.
They already had this conversation too.
Not only is this chapter in the wrong order, it's also the wrong version. Here she is talking as if she hadn't already lost her virginity. This needs serious editing.
This chapter is in the wrong order.
"You won't have a daughter anymore."* Instead of "You won't have any more daughters".
This paragraph makes no sense. Nancy wasn't a part of the argument and her name was never brought up in the argument. Is a part of the argument missing?