I am currently writing two novels: Evil Goddess System and The Stained Tower. The second is not on WebNovel.
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Her present life’s memories should be stronger or just as strong as her past life’s memories.
She should be a little more thoughtful with her actions. After all, shutting down a bakery wouldn’t be that difficult for a future king.
It’s obviously not a game.
I feel like at this point it should be ‘from Earth’ rather than ‘from the real world.’
It’s a very interesting premise and I look forward to the future developments. And if I didn’t like it I wouldn’t bother reviewing. That being said, there’s a glaring issue that really brings this novel down… there’s basically no character descriptions and this includes Christine aka the MC. In fact let me go ahead and list all the things we know about Christine: - They’re female. - They presumably have fox ears and fox tail(s), though this is never explicitly stated in the actual text. - They were called beautiful once in chapter 9 or 10. That’s the extent of Christine’s character description. Hair color, eye color, height, figure, all of these things are left to the imagination, I guess. It’s somehow even worse for the NPCs who are basically just names without descriptions and have no memorable quirks. Not that Christine has any memorable quirks either, nor has she or any of the NPCs had the opportunity to show them it they did. No time was spent assessing the internal situation or exploring the Solstice Empire before the story began focusing exclusively on external matters. That would have been the best time to write some fun NPCs.
There’s a severe lack of character descriptions.