Penniless

keep cooking

I believe you meant to say acolyte instead of Athlete here

+1 it also kinda feels like he's repeating the same information

therer's a typo in the chapter where scratching was used instead of what I think is scrying

I mean scratching

a few corrections divination instead of division and scrying instead of screening

I'd say stick to the main story but anytime the mc gives out a quest (like conquering the step stones) you could write an interlude with the most interesting pov. for instance if the mc ordered the creation of a post service you could have an interlude with the pov of a post carrier. otherwise I personally like reaction interludes, what I Don't like is using interludes for pure foreshadowing (ie some enemy plotting) I much prefer getting surprised together with the mc.

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Hi dont wanna be rude but its incessant instead of incestant so yeah But incestant is certainly funnier anyway thx for the chap