Quake_Midaro

It’s good for now not too big leaves room for DC and Mass Effect characters

He literally only declinded because he wanted benefits he would have gotten if he accepted while snubbing the rest if the benefits… I mean I like serious and steing MC’s but being arrogant to the point of being rude is another thing

Honestly your current writing style is solid 8.5-9/10 the only thing I can think of as a critique is slightly more info given on observations and a bit less info on descriptors but that’s just a personal preference you have a good flow great grammer and good framework you’re doing awesome don’t overthink on where you need to improve because honestly your already better than 98% on this site keep doing what feels good to you when writing if you try to force what doesn’t feel natural you may burn yourself out or start overthinking it consistency is king when your as good as you are already

Poorly translated Cultivation Slop mascaraiding as a DB fic it’s not worth lossing braincells to try and reas this trash

If this is the MC’s mindset this is gonna be a rough story to read it fels like he’s just whining and complaing constantly and that’s just not interesting

Interesting so far the lore dumps are a bit much but that’s literally the only gripe atm looking forward to more take ma stones

So.. the MC straight up embraced the deadbeat persona huh ngl this fic has been rather plain so far so not surprised the MC is leaning toward being flakey hope that changes but eh we will see

MOAR!!!

This is such a boring fic as is it’s pacing is so slow it’s damn near unreadable