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it is ok but you need to change the story a little bit . Having his on partner of our MC convince his system to block his gamers's mind ability and to activated only in battle is the worst ideea ever. The gamer's mind is an ability that needs to ne youstd not just in battle but also in everything . That is the greatest help in every situation from any possibility , including calming the MC for any situations . Block only for fighting is only for battle maniacs and people's that thing only force can rezolv evrerything. So i recomandat If you wish to take in considerations to change back that ability back to her original purpose, also for our MC to punish Draig for put the system change the settings on gamer's mind ( I think "Sun shine" jutsu put it in repet it will be ok ).
Plus you also granted him omniscient , omniprezent power . This is not just Disaster , this is a SUPER DISASTER .
did you have to creat a primordial version of Rimuru[img=Cries]🤦🙍!!!!!!? Really author A version of Rimuru + Primordial + Supreme Deity = Disaster 🎆💥🌍 . You should have never made this version of Rimuru . It is Big and Giant DISASTER . It destroyed the holl storyline .
She is ?! the author made some mistakes in writhing.
IT is kuroka not kuraka
hei author where is the chapter i do not see IT .
No, it doesn't have a single word about the system nor does it say. So I presum some people have said in the comments that to eliminate the system from this story. Plus I say about critics because I see some of them some time that say that stories with or about system content are bad or boring, or destroy the fanfiction stories, say are all fall. And also if is about the story it is actually about an MC without a system I think in the mansion the tag should not be mentioned about the system at all. I am not saying it with bad intentions but I am saying because it is in the tag #system and it will be a problem because it is quite confusing, because it says that it has a system but when you read the story it does not say a single drop of a word about the system at all. I hope that I did not make you angry if I did I am sorry.
🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬 GARBEGI 🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮. Why did he not have taken the Skill Creat and still cheep the system . But NOOOOOO🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬. He have put a stupid and digasting wish to destroy the system that he was give in . If any one see this story he should new that this story is GARBEGI 🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮.Plus author why did you drop the other story. And I also hope that the author and he should drop this story because IT is thrully the worst story in the hollew of the creation of bad fanfictiones and fanfictiones IT self . IT is the worst story that If an other bad story will come IT will not be abel to topoleit in the list of top 100 bad fanfictiones in the howll word . 🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤬🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮