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Sorrias2 days agoComentouSmut, and when is he going to visit his past girls?
- Sorrias2 days agoComentou
Your grammar is horrible, holy shit if you don't even know the concept of the word "the" just use grammarly
- Sorrias6 days agoRespondeu a MiscaMuscaMiqiMaus
Bro chill
- Sorrias8 days agoRespondeu a SirWolfT1
Bro really said "Looks female enough."
- Sorrias8 days agoComentou
Your chapters make me want to beta read, and rewrite this entire thing, so much wasted potential
- Sorrias12 days agoComentou
Unless he literally said clap this doesn't make sense
- Sorrias13 days agoComentou
Sigh... like, why? Genuinely, why? Why do you INSIST on keeping stating the obvious People. Do. Not. Speak. Like. That.
- Sorrias13 days agoComentou
14 chapters in and we still don't have a single proper interaction between characters, just a random guy entering the city, generic reactions and suddenly they're friends this went from 0 to 100 real quick. Have you ever thought that, I don't know, maybe we'd like to see the history progressing in the slice of live aspect? No? oh silly me why would readers ever enjoy reading a history if not for the human interaction.
- Sorrias13 days agoComentou
You... are a horrible story teller author, I don't mean this offensively but you just jump over everything, we were supposed to see the festival, all we got was a damn description of what was happening, not even 2 pages long. Show us what's happening for fucks sake you're writing this history as if you're dragging your finger through the keyboard.
- Sorrias13 days agoComentou
... He literally just said that
