LinYang

We're all learning! You've already got a great start! Don't stay up too late. And if it helps at all you can always finish a story first before uploading ^.^ Let's work hard together!

Hey there, I am terribly sorry that I never actually realized that we were swapping reviews; I was asking some others for honest reviews and I forgot that I had asked you for a swap, so I'm very sorry for that. Anyways, let's go. I'll give some of my honest thoughts. I'm not very big on paranormal stories, but I'll do my best to be objective. Writing quality overall is quite good. I spotted little to no grammar mistakes, though I am a little confused as to whether or not you are writing this in past or present tense. It is best to choose one and to stick to it, and I believe that most people prefer past tense. Stability of updates...I know that we are all busy people. The quality of a work shouldn't be based on how often an author updates, really. I see that you also have other works, so I'll pass on this one. Your story is developing quite fast. The plot moves along at a nice pace. You only have a few chapters out, so I cannot say much more. But your premise right now calls for intrigue. Again, you only have a few chapters out right now, so I cannot say much for character design. However, you seem to have given very little description or explanation of who each character is. Your style also lacks outside narration. For example, if Rina has been staying there for a couple of days, you could probably sum up from her point of view a couple of the people she's with and what they're like, so that the readers have an image in their heads. Again, you only have a few chapters out, so I cannot say much on your world background. However, I think a little more explanation would be good. Are werewolves a secret in this world or not? Is there anything else different about this world? You can drop in hints and things in between thoughts as well. All in all, you've got a good grasp on writing with room for improvement. I feel that you could use narration a bit more rather than staying in the scene, as that can come a bit tiring to readers. Keep writing author; you will become better than you are now.

WN does these kind of glitches often, so I usually scour through beforehand to look for any punctuation marks turned into strange diamonds.

Since WN doesn't really allow much formatting for these headers I'd do something like -Day Three- to make it more clear that you're changing scenes.

"His" instead of "He's"

(No worries I hate 1st person too tbh. This was just an experiment. Maybe one day I'll come back XD)

Thanks for your review, my friend. I appreciate honesty, feedback, and constructive criticism because it helps me know where to improve next time. So thank you for your honesty and insight. Revisions are big weakness of mine. I went over this a couple of times with my sister and we both can agree that the quality dropped halfway through. I am also an impatient person and a tired person, so I have to admit, uploading this so soon was definitely a mistake on my part. But that's on me, not you, and once again, thank you for pointing that out. I will continue writing and keep your points in mind! Thank you for giving mine a try. I really, really, appreciate it.

Thank you so much for your review! Yeah, I found that I did kind of rush the ending too much myself, but at the time I was very tired and wanted to be done with this. Maybe I'll pick it up again one day and rewrite it. I can definitely see what you mean. Thanks again for reviewing. :)

Thanks for your review! I'll be sure to work on the points you mentioned. :)

So far pretty good. Didn't see many grammatical mistakes; book is written in a unique style as well. I like how relatable the main character, though. Do be careful about using emojis though, dear author; they could get you blacklisted. Keep on writing!