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Wait is Ino dating someone at this point? I know she is interacting a lot with Hinata ( off screen as training) at this point but I don’t recall any mention of progress in their relationship where they would be dating

I never understood why people say Merlin attended Hogwarts in fan-fictions. Hogwarts was built around 991 Ad and the Mythos around Merlin is set between 600-700 AD. It’s make more sense if Merlin taught or was a headmaster at Hogwarts in its earlier years for a time then to say he was a student

Great translation, couple of mistakes with names, but otherwise well done. As for the story, damn its hilarious. Definitely not a serious read but very light hearted and fun so far

Well translated novel, but the story just falls flat for me. We find out early on that MC likes Hinata, but he is also an idiot, I mean since when does leaving the village = relationship with Hinata. Also if MC gets system benefits for events, wouldn’t staying with team 7 be the best so he can go through the movie plots aswell. Also stealing what he did when he defected was a brain dead move, everyone will be after him, and him realistically being welcomed back to kanoha is so small I would rather try my luck on the lottery. Another thing I disliked is how much MC’s power fluctuates, I mean he kills Zaboza who is an elite jonin, then a couple of weeks later your telling me he stuggles with Rock Lee. Zaboza should of had no problems with chunin exams Lee, it was written as if the MC was fighting Might Guy in the exam.

I think it would be a good idea to keep her, she likes adventure but has no useful combat abilities, so maybe give her a secretarial role that can give Artoria context and a bridge to the people she will rule. Have her maybe briefing Artoria about events in Camelot as they travel much like what Pepper Potts did for Tony. Possibly flesh her out a little by having SHIELD use her as a relay to Artoria (when black widow is not available) and train her a little. Just don’t give her too little screen time people forget who she is, or too much, with Artoria (unless you want her as a love interest)By keeping her in the picture you can do more ‘daily life of Camelot’ scenes as she explores the city on her days off. As a love interest, not sure, she would need to be fleshed out more.

Considering that you have the Naruto tag, and how she gets things from her system. It could be interesting if she finds a summoning ritual in the library, a ritual that summons a desire. Morgan at this point would desire a rook, knight or queen candidate. Have her use the ritual and summon Izumi Uchiha on the night of the massacre(would be same age as current issei) (knight or queen candidate) Izumi should be easy ish to recruit if you address her trauma, also she awakens 3 tomoe during the massacre. You could also scale the sharringan to devil power. I.e medium rank= 3tomoe, high rank= mangekio, ultimate rank= eternal mangekio, Satan class= rinnegain, Super Devil class = rinne-rinnegain. Would also give a good way for mc to learn chakra, also koroka could teach Izumi sage arts. Another thing you could do with the summoning, is to summon someone from fate I.e artoria saber/lancer (knight candidate), scathach (queen candidate) Mashu Kryielight (rook candidate) and have the evil piece sever their connection to the throne of kings. But if you are strictly staying with dxd characters for the peerage, then grafia but it maybe hard as even if she is not married in this au she is likely still sirzechs queen, momo hanakai (pawn candidate), Ravel, phenex clan would likely trade her for benefits otherwise she would never have been given to Riser, as she would have to wait until she was a high class to be eligible to have the option of her own peerage again(pawn candidate), Tiamat because why not a 3rd dragon (rook or queen candidate)

Got Rias you have to include Akeno, especially due to Akeno’s personality of wanting things Rias is interested in. Save Izumi Uchiha, and add to harem, could be interesting to make her slightly yan (also AU it a bit by having the uchiha massacre happen a couple of years later, otherwise she will only be 13/14) (bishop/queen) Yue from Arifureta (bishop/queen) Hinata Hyūga, would be good, maybe plant the seeds on first visit when saving Izumi, (have time run faster in Naruto world so 10 or so years pass when MC comes for second visit) (rook) Momo from to love ru (bishop) Ayane (rook) and/or Kyoka (rook/knight) from dragons rioting Ena Seishuuin from campione (knight)

I thought he hadn’t done the last step with Erika yet

Loving the story so far, but I’m not sure about adding other Arthurian characters to the story

I like the idea, but I would make some changes, I think it would be a good idea to play off of Raphael’s name and artorias supposed powers as ‘holy’, so do castoria appearance (personally would like stage 2) with angel wings, and claim her to be Astoria’s guardian angel, this will give fury less headaches (no magical person he can’t track as she pops in and out of reality, as he will assume she is bound to artoria) and she can talk to her system without too many questions. It’s believable aswell as fury will eventually put the pieces together that Artoria is Arthur from legends (just not maybe his earth), he’s not the king of spies for nothing. Romance wise, remember that Artoria has memories from a time period where a king would have one official wife and it was common practice for kings to also have consorts.I know there isn’t a harem tag so you could probably get away with 1 or2 more interests before people start to complain (if you wanted to)