DetachedDreamer

lol author is a raging virgin, if he ends in suicide I wouldn't be surprised. but don't do it. someone must love you. somewhere.

the authors understanding of English isn't at the level needed for success. im out. good luck.

This is bad. really, really bad. you don't have to read past chapter 1 to know that this story is a joke. im guessing this is a prank by the author. You aren't serious about writing. why did you waste our time? there could be some plot to this story that would have been enjoyable (probably not) IF the author knew an ounce of English. just a tiny fraction and I wouldn't be so harsh. but hearing words on TV in English and repeating them doesn't mean you should attempt writing fanfictions. write in your home language and be happy. you shot for the stars but ended up crashing in a garbage bin.

Last two paragraphs make no sense

This is a version of pokemon thats been stripped of everything that made it magical. All the wonder and beauty just an illusion made by the evil and terrible league. yes the league is evil and they don't want to make money so even rattata is unaffordable to the common family. they can't even house one pokemon. In this dark world where the only good people were the mysterious folk who took the MC in and are now dead. he begins with nothing and his power is garbage. Of course that means he joins Team Rocket and is giving a terribly and boring pokemon to start with. He has no friends. no reason to live except exist, for this world offers nothing but cruelty. lol This premise has been done multiple times and I find it to be underwhelming every time. my review may seem hasty but this best rating I can give with such a blasphemous, corrupt version of the pokemon universe. Tragedy is one think but being forced fed tragic situation after tragic situation is just too much and drowns the story. having said all that, the translation is great and anyone who likes a sad version of pokemon this is for you.

that makes no sense from a pokemon universe stand point. the league would want more trainers. thst fact that poor people can't afford is detrimental to the league and the world. this story is such an AU trying to justify why it is what it is, is stupid. pokemon is such a magical world and this version is just a pathetic, generic, overly tragic attempt. not that it makes it bad. but you justifying it sounds hilarious.

seems forced. Mori hasn't actually done anything to change the timeline now that I think about it, only taking other people's places yet ultimately still ending up at the same event or outcome as the original. Will that be how the whole story goes or will there actually be original content created because of the MCs existence?

well that's disappointing. did the same thing vegeta did with cell.

Im going to give this a 5 stars because I'm the fan of the series. I might end up dropping it only because I value the immersion I get from fanfics, being a male heterosexual is a big part of the immersion requirements I look for in an MC but I still got to show love to any author thats a fan of TVD. Good luck with your story!

Jesus this story sounds terrible lol