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Perhaps a little late for any response, but I wouldn't say my story is that good. I'm just another idiot with a computer. But much of the content here, on this website, is... subpar translations and powerwanks, and I hope to avoid that atleast a little. At least you don't have to read it machine translated
I think you mean the first OFA user, and no. All for One can, in my little story here, see quirks someone has, and his brother doesn't have one. Instead, it's the stockpiling quirk that stockpiled All for One himself, and also his quirk, which let it give itself away.
Good writing quality and stability of updates, but the problem is the story itself, atleast up til chapter 50, where I stopped reading becuase I am not wasting Fast Passes on this if the same quality continues. The main character is just bland, a blank paper that nothing is written on. This might be something that the skill of Cranberry, but I doubt it. The reincarnation part is also utterly useless, and it never factors into the story or the character, outside of a quirky comment about names in this new world. Cranberry is just the good old "abused but not THAT bad", forgetting the fact that after killing someone she complained that she didn't get a cool magic, like pyromancy. Honestly, while I don't like the mother I can see how it can be hard to love this child. The world encounters the same problem that every world with this type of system encounters; the fact that it should all be ruled by extremely powerful warlords that carve out their own part of the world while monopolizing good places for farming EXP. I honestly can't recommend this story, which I feel is a pity because the premise is good, the writing quality is amazing, but the world is thought out so poorly, and the main character just isn't any good, while the supporting cast cant even begin to pull their own weight, let alone help the story out. It feels like it could be unique, but instead it feels like several genres smashed togheter in a poor attempt to create a good story, and instead you end up with an amalgamation of all the bad parts and some of the good ones. A real pity.
Id say so, yes, as while it isnt canon compliant, even if it was it would still be a fanfic
Shameless author review here. If you want a story with a harem, this is not for you. If you want a power fantasy with no opposition what so ever, with an infallable MC, I don't think this story is for you, but it still might be. If you do choose to read this story, I thank you for doing so, but if you don't that is fine with me. If you read the entire story, then thank you, and I hope you leave a comment and a review, it always warms my heart when I see those. Hope you enjoy the story, if you choose to read it.
Might sound better if it’s the Uchiha clan instead of Uchiha clan, but that might just be me
A throw through her left arm? Did you mean a throw with her left arm, as in using her left arm to throw someone?
Pretty sure you meant sparring here, not sparing
Pretty sure the dot at the end here is unnecessary
I think it will flow better if it says; as the sun was slowly hiding under the horizon, instead of; the sun was slowly hiding under the horizon
I think it will be better if it says with a not not exactly hidden laugh, compared to with not exactly hidden smile
I take this comment as some dislike of the ending, but I think it fit. It might be a bit to open, but I felt as if this was a good place to end. Remember, to All For One no price is too great, including his own life, something he is always willing to risk as long as the risk and reward ratio is good, which in this case it was.
I might make that, although I am not sure. I might also make a few more chapters exploring the relationship between Kuro and Kyoko, although school is kicking my ass, and All Might summed it up nicely; They are more or less on will with two bodies, and their bond through All For One makes it essentially impossible for them to disagree on a goal.