Kairyn

I’m pretty sure it’s AI writing. Not that it’s bad or anything, but the flowery writing style feels a bit too fake and a little aggravating. It’s like I’m reading a story about AI masquerading as humans in a world made by AI. I don’t know, like CGI almost in the way it makes me feel.

So not a Star Wars fan then…..

I’ d like to say that I appreciate your work and the effort to write this story. I enjoy it sincerely.

Uh..I realize I’ m new here but... its literally not your story sooooo if u don’t like it don’t read it?? Idk. Don’t mean to sound like a sick or anything sorry.

We stand tall….. Mormonts from asoiaf house words are Here we stand. Nice

At this point, My brain is doing an automatic autocorrect/grammer/sentence restructuring to read this story.

Hey your story man, as long as you have an outline of future steps should be fine.

+1

I like the story. Honestly the relationship with Artoria is a bit off putting, if only because it seems shes being used as a fluffer between two other woman at times. But, I like the character arc. The main character does seem weirdy forgetful at times, but I marked it down as kaleidoscope shenanigans. Other than that the story feels well written with the author seemingly having an actual idea where the story is heading. Which is the first time for me as a fanfiction reader.

Its an omniversal fix it fanfic basically. Full of fluff and crack, and just enough plot to be a fun enjoyable read. Grandpa Universe is your favorite grandpa traveling and saving who he can.