IOnlyEatDinner

Wow, what a review from someone who have only read up to the first chapter. Did you review a pokemon story from your dream or something?

Some play it well and actually make it logical and acceptable, but most execute it badly, so might as well take it off the equation in its entirely.

This is looking more and more like a story written by an adolescent or maybe an AI. I thought it was a translation of a CN fanfic but this is waaaaay too illogical for that. CN fanfics may be filled with unhinged patriotism and racial remarks, but most of what I've read capture the behind the scenes politics and "what to do and not to do" very well, this one though? Logic thrown out the window.

Wtf is even happening anymore, the story is becoming more and more incoherent as chapters passes.

"Edited" but Raven is suddenly here. Where's the proper continuity? It was still bearable before but why this another sudden drop in quality?

Vitarays. Vitality + Ray = Light of Life. It's a funny translation.

I may have been slow on the pick up but Bestia seems to be Rogue.. and Postmortem (pfft) is Afterlife.

Steelers? The raffen shivs?

There's the cold, with gap moe and all, then there's the bitchy. They don't always go together. That's why Tsunderes get a lot of hate, because they could be obnoxious and bitchy, but the "dere" part comes in clutch most of the time.

He's dishing out the Saiyan special.