mutekishifu

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Don't take the low rating as an attack. First of all, I don't have a problem with summons – if you want, you can summon the entire Gotei 13 with its 100,000 shinigami... as long as you can make it fun. The issue is that by focusing on summoning, you sacrifice a lot in world-building and character development. A more interesting alternative would be to have a small Berserion clan and let Erza come from that clan. This way, she could be trained by you as her master and earn system rewards, evolving with your guidance. You’d build a relationship this way, something similar to what could be done with Zoro. The problem here is that your story is filled with nonsensical moments – and when I say "filled," it's like the number of stars in the sky. For example: I just became Kazekage – what should I write about the village's development? You attempt to address this, but very superficially. You start talking about events 40 or 60 years in the future, which doesn’t make sense now and could be addressed later. Then you create an Anbu, a Root, and a ninja school… Alright, but how is this organized? How many ninjas do you have? What's the projection for the future? Who is on your administrative council? Which Suna clans helped you found the village? After all, this is the first generation, so there would naturally be political dynamics. What are the main challenges, and how did you solve them? It feels like you have ten tons of gold but nowhere to spend it. It gets to a point where you say you've done something, but we never see the main character giving orders to any Suna shinobi. I challenge you to name a single Suna character, aside from the summoned ones. This makes the novel deserve zero stars, and it's my biggest problem so far. Regarding the Daimyo, this part irritated me deeply, as I questioned your logical reasoning here. Where have we ever seen a Kage pay a Daimyo? It’s the Daimyo who allocates resources. What’s his role if you’re the one paying? It’s like saying, “Here’s a ton of gold, Daimyo, please continue to favor us.” But what is he even contributing if the money apparently comes from the Kazekage?

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no, it is namek

Unfortunately, I have to make this critique: 1 star for overusing ChatGPT. There are entire chapters that are irrelevant and overly flowery. 3 stars for lacking basic knowledge of Naruto's history. I'll give a few basic examples: anyone, even someone who isn't a true fan, knows that Hashirama founded Konoha because of the death of children. Kids as young as 3 or 4 were on the battlefield, killing each other, and that was horrible. You're trying to tell me that the protagonist didn't receive any professional training, even though he's the future leader of a great clan, until he was 6 or 7 years old? Come on, in Konoha (time Hashirama created it), ninja school starts at that age! This basically undermines the main reason ninja villages were created. Also, the protagonist trains alone for 6 months in a village full of people with the Kagura Mind's Eye? Even Zetsu wouldn't be able to go unnoticed there... In summary, this story is so poorly written that, while I can usually overlook some details and pretend I didn't notice to keep reading, here it was impossible.

I get that they wanted to make a drama about Gaara and the Jinchuuriki, but they went way overboard, and it turned into a Gen Z Naruto. Man, when the world throws a truckload of bad things at you, a real man takes it, cries where no one can see, smiles in front of others, and fights against it. The protagonist? "Aaaaa, he died, it's your fault, your fault, your fault, and that guy crossing the street too! How cruel the world is, and to show my frustration, I’ll throw a tantrum like a 4-year-old who didn’t get his PlayStation 5. How cruel the world is." Dude, you were doing so well in the first 6 or 7 chapters. The author might excuse it by saying the protagonist is just a teenager and not mature like Itachi, but the protagonist is more childish than the original Naruto.

drop here,

There are so many problems here, let's start. Nerf, but not just nerf, let's throw in a huge nerf. The guy buys a bloodline and it already comes with a percentage, I hate this idea. Who was the genius who came up with this? 51% bloodline has 4x more chakra. 60%? Wow, it increased a lot (how much? Nobody knows). But the information window still hasn’t upgraded the rank from elite Genin to Chunin, so it must not be much. The more I read this, the dumber I feel. I’m almost certain the author is just ripping off a Chinese novel, because there’s no way this guy could come up with so much nonsense. Because of the anger it caused me, I’m giving it one star. Don't like it? I don't care.

Then raise the damn rank to Chunin, because I have a huge urge to give a 1-star review. As an author, you need to listen more to the readers. If everyone is complaining and you're the only one thinking it's wonderful, something is very wrong. I better go give that review. Honestly, I started skipping chapters because I feel like I'm not missing anything by skipping 3 or 4 chapters at a time.