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For me, It's really hard to connect to a character with an ever changing personality, and the MC's an example of it. There should always be an established personality depicted before developing it. The problem for me here is that MC's personality changes suddenly and it just doesn't feel right. It feels like a new character is just abruptly there.
If you want to read something just to pass time and turn off your brain, this is somewhat bearable. Suggestions: This needs a lot of editing on its grammar, the tenses doesn't flow well making the reading experience very disconcerting. It also suffers from over description of the minor things; for example the MC is just going to simply park his car but the sentence include how he turns his wheel and how the tire screeches left its mark, like bruh it's fine for some scenes but turn it down a little 'cause I simply skim over it when it's too excessive. I also feel that the dialogues needed some work because it feels off for some reason. I just don't feel the dialogues engaging (that's just for me). For now that's all.
For real, it's a slog to read the chapters. Also this lolbingolol guy is present to all threads that says the things they dislike about this book, and ol' reliable lolbingolol will say something on defense. I dunno if this guy is a religious c*ck s*cker of the author or just the author's alt account.
Are you the author's alt account? You seem so invested on trying to reason out any criticisms in the reviews.
Please come back 😣