IsekaiMan1

honestly without lemons even as bare as you write then this story isn't really much its just some guys becoming op with a lot of the details chopped off

all these chapters are basically repeating the same thing

these short don't show any real progress

longer chapters

if you're here for the r18 they are paywalled

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the dialogue is so awkward

one chapter and the grammar is worse

u need something to separate different scenes like ------‐---------

needs a few minor edits