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Bro author you suddenly start referring to a “she” recalling the hero killer without any mention of a name. We have to guess its Mia, but you need to specifiy names in a third person POV to make the dialogue clear. I notice you fail to mention names appropriately a lot during conversations or during the flow of a scene.
Author “BOOM” is not a good description of what happened in a fight scene particularly to finish someone off. I understand doing it once in a while for effect, but just doing it repeatedly as a form to finish someone off is bad writing.
Even has charm as a stat
You’re right I could’ve been nicer and I apologize for that. However I read the original comment and not the replies where you said its based on storylines. That being said when I saw the original comment that said no harem I decided to read it, spend time and money on it despite some of the other flaws because of the story and its potential. Adding harem after saying there wouldn’t be one in the original comment (as well as the actual story), seems like I got scammed out of my money. I read this specifically because I saw a potential good plot and no harem. Finding out after its too late and having already spent my money isn’t really cool. You should at least add a harem tag for future potential readers who don’t want to spend money reading a harem book. Once again Im sorry on the way I relayed my message, there was no need to insult you.
Cant edit his chapters. Plot holes. Added a harem after leading ua to believe there wouldn’t be one. Mediocre novel and author.
Yep dropping this. Honestly author you are a moron. Early in the novel you have MC say he and his father don’t believe in polygamy, you also mention in the first post no harem and suddenly change your mind. Its obvious from your writing you don’t have a clear picture of the direction you want the novel to go in. The proof is in the amount of plot holes in this novel. Adding harem also just proves you’re just horny and can’t create decent romance. Honestly this novel would be better without any romance but having a virgin author can’t allow that. I mean you can’t even reread your chapter and edit it with good grammar. You clearly dont care anout the plot and just want the characters to fuck.
Why would he not know the moves from his past live?
Just read a romance story then?
Really bro? If you’re going to use such shallow romance youd be better off without it author.
Nah dont listen to him hes just a horny virgin. If you must have romance do good character building built on sensible plot and reasonable personality.