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I have read thousands of chapters of various novels from Japanese to Chinese to Korean.
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Mentally a man, but physically? Physically Rimuru can be anything your heart desires. ;)
"This one would have a happy ending... eventually..." I wish more stories did this. Sure, it's a spoiler and slightly dampens the surprises and drama because you know at the end everything will be fine, but its also nice just to enjoy a hardcore, depressing and grim story knowing that everything will be resolved at the end with a happy ending.
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Could have probably done without the 'to call a certain person'. It's implied he'll call someone when he takes out his phone. It's just useless words.
Barely makes sense. How would she have a photo of him? Why would she not know if she does? Was she randomly taking photos before approaching him? Feels forced. Jarring.
Overall, pretty alright so far. Writing quality is brilliant, great grammar and vocabulary. However, the story is already seeming to be fairly repetitive. First chapter was especially bad, every other paragraph felt like the same thing just phrased differently.
I'd avoid repeating stuff at the start of chapters, because while its somewhat good for returning readers its just jarring for people reading all in one sitting. If you want or need to do something like this, then write the paragraph differently, don't just copy and paste.
Just want to flex my meagre knowledge for a sec: Generally, if someone is knocked unconscious, especially through a physical impact, then that means something has gone very, very wrong. There is a good chance they will die if they don't receive medical treatment very soon as serious internal bleeding is likely. Just wanted to point that out as anime, games and basically all media show being knocked out as being fairly safe for the victim and just a temporary loss of consciousness. These criminals aren't exactly underserving of such a fate.
average webnovel reader: i have crung and you must know
rolled a 1 on a speech check
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A skirt wouldn't actually be that bad if you had shorts. A skirt over a full bodysuit would be pretty good as well. Just a bodysuit is pretty questionable.
woooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo. oo
Shame. Was hoping he would stay as an old guy. It was what made me interested in the novel in the first place, now it just feels like any old multiverse travelling novel but with a 'wiser' main character.
Timeskip. Left the restaurant and then came back later when he heard the news.
That moment when some of your best guys get blitzed like cannon fodder
Amagi Brilliant Park
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