You really need to work on the grammar. Use a grammar checker or something. Dialogue from different people should be on different lines, not jumbled up into one paragraph. Also, names should be capitalized. Nick Fury not nick fury.

Author, you really need to use some spell and grammar checkers. Just using something like Grammarly, and it'll improve your writing immensely. You have a lot of errors all in each chapter, but your story itself is great.

If you want to improve your writing, don't start sentences with 'and'.

Suicide is for those of weak will. I'd remove that part and just have him be murdered by one of the mutants instead.

I like the story but the translation could use some work. The dialogue contains a lot of multiple paragraphs not formatted properly which makes it difficult to read. Sometimes, words are translated inconsistently. When working with multiple paragraphs of dialogue from a single person, you need to put quotes at the beginning of the paragraph.

Wow, I really liked this story until the author just gave up and wrapped up the entire story in one chapter. What the fuck. Why waste our time reading this shit if you're going to drop it? Don't read this as the author gave up on writing it.

The MC has an immortal cultivation technique. It just starts in a Wuxia world, but that's just a mortal plane amongst the myriad planes of a Xanxia world.

What's with the bait and switch, using MTL? Way to ruin this webnovel...

He's already said why he is giving them out. It's just a beginner technique and not that strong. He's expecting to get a lot more stronger cultivation techniques in the future that will maintain him being stronger than everyone else.

The grammar on this story needs some work. One glaring issue is that dialogue. The person speaking and what they said are in two different paragraphs. It makes it really hard to tell who is talking.

Let's hope he isn't so dumb next time and just kills people who are actively trying to kill him.

incantation, not incarnation

Well, that was a fun ride. There were some parts where the story was just pure info and little characterization. Chen Chen was almost 2d where he didn't seem to care about anyone, so that took a little out of the story. I kept getting a Warhammer 40,000 vibe, so I was glad that the end basically spelled out that it is what the story was either based on or an alternate reality of wh40k

Hey translator, why are you splitting up dialogue into paragraphs? This is very odd and it makes it hard to read. Please read up on writing dialogue in English.

You seem to started to write dialogue improperly. I know it's popular with some authors on webnovel who don't understand english, but you seem to be doing well so far. I would avoid writing dialogue with the format of 'name: "text". I've enjoyed your story so far, however, if you continue writing dialogue in such a way, I will have to drop this story.

You need to call it alchemy and not "the pill".

Well, that's not a good start. They all have to split up and leave a "heavily" warded castle? Why would they do that instead of waiting for reinforcements. Also, they can all apparate. Why would they have to split up and use brooms? This makes no sense.

your -> you're I would suggest using grammarly to fix some easy spelling or grammar issues.

You should remove the bit about him closing one of his eyes when shooting. Is he an *******?