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Really good so far, only thing lacking so far is some depth to the characters, but I'll guess we may get that in the upcoming chapters, and some initial world building, especially in the dradfort. But it's early days. Everything else was great so far!

Is this some chinese HP novel that you're autotranslating or something? Like come on, how can you even misspell Hogwarts as Hogue? My advise is to use a spell checker, like word spell check or grammarly and edit all the most basic mistakes, then make sure the story specific mistakes like Hogue don't appear.

Love this story! Your writing style is captivating. In my opinion i'd think a writing style of 75/25 would be perfect, 75% of the chapters or so from Magnus PoV, 25% from others PoV. If you could manage a ratio thereabout without breaking immersion I'm sure you'd be able to create a world where it feels like there are other real human beings, except magnus. Their interaction from their PoV with him and others around him is the key. Looking forward to more!

This is one of the top fics i'm following right now! Refreshing to see a fic set in a different era than most of the others, combined with the excellent writing, the interesting plot and intriguing characters makes me look forward to this every week!

Really enjoyed this fic! The characters feel more real than the ones from your other fic. Just that Sub has a modicrum of empathy makes a world of difference! Will you update the story? I saw that there are 89 chapters of this on p*treon?

If you've read the 6 available chapters its obv that the MC is the one that will be the one stealing the girls

Really interesting so far. Love the introduction of the MC and the relationship with Belial built. Interesting 'starting' race, hope it's utilized in the future. Insane speed of updates, for now, hope u can keep going! All in all, really looking forward to the future of the novel!

I'm usually not one that reviews novels after I read them, but I had to make an exception with this. I seriously love the main character so far. I love the way the main character is bashing the OG main Takashi with solid deductions that finds fault with Takashi's character, and the way the OC is manipulating others without being overtly obvious about it is just sooo good! I hope you keep up the frequency of the updates, I will definitely follow this! I just hope that you read through the chapters once more before posting, the quality of your writing is definitely decent, but there are jumbled parts here and there that lowers the overall impression.