But he has no experience of a Kage level ninja...

It's more like he is calling for his pet than a fellow warrior.

Your punctuations are bad but interestingly some how the story is still readable.[img=recommend]

I have only one suggestion to make, you need to take into consideration how people in general, the NPCs will interact with Campione. Some arbitrary lines without consideration will hinder the flow of the story. The interactions in this chapter is more suitable for a crack fic.

So far the story was going well. It has be understood that the MC is an uncrowned king, who is feared first. No one is going to approach him as depicted in these lines. My comments are on the view that this fic has more serious elements than comedy elements. These lines are more suited for crack fics.

Was the letters appearing in front of him not supposed to be readable? Because it was not for me. I too am a fan of I am in Hollywood. Exited to read something similar 😃

MC need to invest points in his EQ...

Infinity stones are supposed to have infinite energy.

From modern era? They have devices that can store a creatures weighing tons into small balls. They have the technology to teleport the said balls to miles away. We are backward in comparison.

I believe there a contradiction, because in previous chapter Joseph didn't know about the crobat, and in this chapter he says he found the crobat to be an intelligent one.

You may have to refine your story a little bit. The weight behind the campione title is considerably less in the story. Since Fleur was able to identity Harry as a campione her mother would definitely be alle to do the same and you could have added her reaction giving more life to the story.

Vivi's infatuation with Lucas happened way too fast. There was little to no proper interaction between them. You just made that up for just for the sake of it. It does not give a good picture

It's ok. If he is a big fan of One Piece he will be trusting Straw hats. Buy I hope he doesn't tell that they are from a manga.