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Who is Yuchuan? forgot to translate something?

thanks for the chapter. spotted a few missspelled words, "reaslised" was one and "hus" instead of his was another one. and i think you forgot "she" in a sentence at the end. "there was nothing she could say.."

Quite a good Story so far. The Writing Quality of this Novel is on the better side than most on Webnovel, and the Character and World Design are quite good so far. Its slow paced but not too slow to make you Bored. I'm also happy with the 18+ Content since its not 5 Chapters in and every 3 Chapters after that. Im looking for Novels and not pure 18+ Content, I'm fine with it being there since it allows stories to go deeper without skipping the more Mature Parts. Just don't let get in the Way of the Storytelling. 5 Stars so far, maybe I will edit it later since there are not enough Chapters out to judge if the "Lemons" will get out of hand.

The Writing Quality is good enough to Binge read it. There are a few inconsistencies sometimes they can be explained with a difference between Novel and Anime and sometimes they just look like mistakes. But still better than around 90% of the Novels I have seen on this Page. The Stability is easy to judge even before you start reading so I will ignore it. The Story Development is somewhere between Okayish and Good, sometimes its really great and may even surprise you while on other occasions it feels a bit forced but overall still great. The Character Designs and World Backgrounds are overall really good. Overall 4.4 Stars

thanks for the chapter, allow me to ask why is it that the author is unable to call the main character just Akira? we know that he is Akira Uchiha there is no need to keep repeating his Surname every time he is adressed .

im not 100% sure but i think the byakugan hat only a 359° vision and had a black spot in the back.

Story and all was okayish even though the Characters are not the brightest in the Shed, Danzo got a massive IQ debuff and Mikoto feels more like an innocent Ghost took over her Body instead of the Real deal. The moment the R18 started everything dipped massively. Story development slowed down to a crawl, at least every second chapter is R18 and the Writing Quality in General just took a Nosedive. Im not talking about Logic holes that the Setting creates, that is a whole other thing...

Hat?

and he still has Rae's passive as well... Not someone you want to go unarmed against.

I just started with the story and will later update the Review so take everything with a grain of Salt. The writing as a whole is okay it just has many cases where you use 2 or 3 adjectives for a single word or where the tenses of the words switch midsentence and get confused. I would guess that it gets fixed somewhere within the novel, but the first 100 Chapters will probably need a rework or Edit to fix it. A simple solution would be the usage of a program to just quickly edit the Text. Something like Grammarly would do. I don't know if that is also the reason why sometimes the Characters just sound and feel like they are just teens even though its stated that they are Adults and sometimes even in their forties. That would be the reason for 3/5 for Writing Quality. The Story as a whole is quite good and the Character and World Design so far was nice as well. If the Quality of the writing improves I'm fairly certain that this novel will more or less force you to binge read it which I really like and enjoy. So Overall a really nice Novel that could go well with a little editing