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Is it wrong to take a break in Danmachi?

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Alvar has finished his goal by protecting his world from its evil and succeeded in building a kingdom to help the races live in harmony. Still, after living for so long and working on his kingdom he wished to retire, so he picked his most trusted friends and taught them how to lead the kingdom and look after it in his stead. Afterward, Alvar with the help of his magic, items and elementals traveled to a different world to rest and complete his promise. =============================================== A/N This is the first time I wrote a ff so any suggestions and criticism are welcome so that I can improve. Also, I don't own anything but my OCs and I am mainly using Danmatchi as a template so I might change things like some monsters or characters and so on. English isn't my first language so do correct some of the mistakes I make!

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Yellow_Duck_Toy
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nice story, can't wait for more! :) (For the 50 words minimum):ddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd

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I see potential in this fanfic and so far I like it and I hope you can continue your best in this fanfic and don’ t just suddenly discontinue it like many other good fanfic I read

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it's it's good story and I others enjoy it but the whole hiding identity thing is not my cup of tea gggjdbhebdhjdbsbskskdndnlendbdkssmdbsmsmsnsndkdnrnfbdndndf

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A good story, I still can't give a high rating, but these first 15 chapters were wonderful. I hope the quality continues. Looking forward to more chapters!

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